‘ More Than Me ‘ A Poem by Sophia Chawala

More than me’

Take a good look at the sunset sky

Raise your head above the mountainside

Tilt you head back to the right

Now what do you see in sight?

 

I see…

Waging wars

Raging seas

Striking poor

Rising disease

Yes, I see much more

Than you

More than me, more than you.

 

Take a sharp view over the docks anew

Out across the waters’ sparkling view

What really lies behind those stars?

What shines behind that light afar?

 

I sense…

Drying darkness

Exploding skies

Empty goodness

Tears cried dry

Yes, I sense much more

Than you

More than me, more than you

 

Take your eyes off the garden ground

Try to reel your body round

Round away from rails that bound

Open your ears, what is that sound?

 

I hear…

A silent cry

A whip of smoke

A red-pool dye

A violent stoke

Yes, I hear much more

Than you.

More than me, more than you

 

Take your gaze off your ails

Explore off map and break the sails

Break to the unknown with fervid pace

Take a pause, now what do you taste?

 

I taste…

Ghastly green

Musty blue

Blazing red

Dim, dead dew

Yes, I taste much more

than you

More than me, more than you.

 

Now take your sights aback from view

Breathe in and open your palms in two

And you will see hands—only hands

with scars so few,

So clench them shut

‘cause there is more than you.

 

Sophia Chawala

 

4 thoughts on “‘ More Than Me ‘ A Poem by Sophia Chawala

  1. An excellent poem. After her poem “Dad” Sophia has panoramically provoked the four senses of all the “dads”–rather every one–to see, feel, listen and taste what is all around. I will sum up that it conveys me:

    Either exist as you are!
    Or be as you look.

    Mirza

  2. A most beautiful creation after a long time.It reflects amazing sensitivity to everything good and bad happening around and the composer’s heightened awareness about it …expressed in most apt and beautifully selected words. Saadia.

  3. An amazing poem. I have read it few times and every time enjoyed it more than previous time. Its rhythm and flow is like a beautiful soft music you want to hear it again and again—-. My favorite is the last part;

    Now take your sights aback from view

    Breathe in and open your palms in two

    And you will see hands—only hands

    with scars so few,

    So clench them shut

    ‘cause there is more than you.”

    This poem is about :
    `More than me, more than you’

    It is a beautiful catch phrase.
    Fayyaz

  4. This poem impacted me very deeply.
    This young lady has extraordinary literary potentials.
    The poem is flowing like stream of emotions.
    It is a beautiful blend of pathos, hope and aspiration.
    Sophia is a master in creating beauty by contrast.
    She is intellectually multi-dimentional and multi-layered.

    Look at the following sub headings in the poem:
    (a) I see…
    (b) I sense…
    (c) I hear…
    She is not only dealing with internal anguishes, she is expressing external tragedies as well!
    Waging wars
    Raging seas
    Striking poor
    Rising disease
    Please ask your daughter/granddaughter/niece to read, reflect and enjoy this marvellous poem.
    nSalik

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